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It’s day 5 of Writing 201:Poetry and the assignment is to use the following in a poem:
Today’s prompt: fog
Fog. Today’s word prompt can be taken in so many different directions: condensation on your car’s window. An eerie landscape (or streetscape) at dawn. Your glasses as you enter a warm room from the cold outside. The mental state of confusion, forgetfulness, or dementia. How will you introduce fog into your poem today?
Today’s form: elegy
Today’s form, the elegy, can trace its history all the way to ancient Greece. It started out as a poem that could be about almost any topic, as long as it was written in elegiac couplets (pairs of verse, with the first one slightly longer than the second). Over the centuries, though, it became something a bit more specific: a (more often than not) first-person poem on themes of longing, loss, and mourning
Today’s device: metaphor
Not Alone
I’m not alone here where I stand
in fields of green my friend
You promised you would always stay
close by no matter where I am
If I could touch your warm hand
And feel your white breath
Rising slowly upon the cold morning air
Glimpse your misty presence near
I would raise my eyes to the sky above
My hesitant heart would laugh
And my soul, ethereal fingers outstretched
Would touch your face once more
~ MEW
busy lady said:
I enjoyed your elegy and your metaphors. Has a very sad feel, full of love and missing the person, which I understand is part of what makes an elegy. In reading your comment to me about my elegy, I think you must be talking about your mom.
Thanks for sharing it.
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mariewilliams53 said:
Thank you! I’m pleased that my elegy had the desired effect. I was very tearful as I was typing it. Yes mum was on my mind as well as a couple of other people who are no longer here. Thank you for taking the time “busy lady” to comment. 🙂
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lightwalker1 said:
Lovely poem. Your metaphors really enhance the mood of loss and love. kindest regards Cheryle
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mariewilliams53 said:
Thank you so much, Cheryle. It brought me to tears, and I’m the one who wrote it! kind regards, Marie
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